ManuscriptQA
Founding batch · 5 slots · December delivery
A defect report for your manuscript, not a critique of your taste.
Send your manuscript or any three chapters. Within seven days you get a written defect report and a prioritized revision plan — every finding with a location and a suggested fix, ranked by what actually moves readers.
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What the report contains
- 01
Structure
Plot holes, continuity errors, setup/payoff failures and subplot drift — with chapter and scene locations.
- 02
POV discipline
Head-hopping, filter-word padding and POV violations, the silent ones included.
- 03
Pacing map
Where the tension sags and where the reader exits, scene by scene.
- 04
Prose patterns
Metaphor density per chapter, epistemic overreach (characters or narration knowing things they shouldn't), repeated constructions.
- 05
Character drift
Voice and motivation departures, tracked per character.
- 06
Prioritized fixes
What to change first, what to leave alone, and why.
Example
What a report looks like for a passage.
Finding 12 · POV break · Ch. 3, Sc. 2
Dana pocketed the gallery key while Marcus argued with the guard about parking. She had rehearsed this a hundred times, and her hands were steady. Marcus watched her go and wondered, not for the first time, whether she'd ever planned to split anything at all.
Problem: The scene is anchored in Dana's point of view. The last sentence jumps into Marcus's head ("wondered") mid-scene: a silent head-hop.
Fix: Keep the doubt, but show it from outside: "Marcus watched her go. He didn't smile." Or move his thought to a scene he narrates.
Representative fragments, prepared on a synthetic passage. Client reports carry chapter locations tuned to their manuscript.
Why Us
The audit runs on the same QA system I use on my own books before they go to my external reviewer, whose chapter ratings have sat at 9.6 to 9.9 across a full series. The system finds the defects; we do the read and write the plan. You get both.
Founding terms
Three-chapter partial
$90
$150 after December
Full manuscript, to 120k words
$180
$300 after December
- — Founding rate billed half on slot confirmation, half on delivery.
- — Steady clients (after December) pay upfront in full.
- — A testimonial if the report earns one. That's the exchange.
- — Formats: .docx, .doc, PDF or plain text.
- — Your manuscript stays yours. Nothing is stored or shared.
Not included
No ghostwriting, no line-edit rewriting of your sentences, no promises about sales or bestseller lists. If a finding requires rewriting a scene, the report tells you which scene and what the fix is. The writing stays yours.
Five slots. Delivery starts December 1.
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